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Comments for 'Neverland: A New Mission'



CoLd BlooDed
12:57 am | May 26, 2004
Pretty good, although I think that you repeated words a bit too much in this particular chapter.
Mainevent
12:50 am | May 24, 2004
Neverland is the place all of the dead warriors of honor from Humanity and Covenant side went. It isn't heaven, it isn't hell. They still have to fight. The people in Neverland don't even really know where they are.
MC's Cousin
7:12 pm | May 23, 2004
I believe Helljumper's question can be answered by reading a couple pervious works...but even I am not thouroghly "in the know".
I agree with Main about the Dog Company and length.
Just a few personal things; reading abbreviated ranks (speach and paragraph) was a little odd, and I think comm. can be COM. But other than that, it was pretty good.

Signing Off


MCC
Helljumper
3:57 pm | May 23, 2004
Whats Neverland? am i missing something

ODST
Mainevent.
3:21 pm | May 23, 2004
Not bad. A little short though. And also, I doubt they'd name one dog company, it would likely be delta.


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