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Comments for 'Subit Sepulcrum Titan Ipsi- Chapter 1' |
Sage Scorpion
11:57 pm | March 7, 2004
Actually, no one really knows for certain. It's just how you prefer. Just like the "Reach; REACH" thing, same for "Spartan; SPARTAN". I might end up writing it with lower case instead, cause I AM gonna have content with them included, with more than just a passing reference. Because (I don't remember if I put this in the author's note or not) my story does not have the death of the SPARTANs on Reach. However, John did go to Halo-04, and destroy it. Think of my series of as a kind of Halo 3, Halo 3.5. It's several years after the invasion of Earth, and it's basically a stalemate. A new class of SPARTANs has been developed, the III's. So, I don't know. Right now, I have no driving plots, I'm going to do this chapter by chapter and see where it goes. Heh, even I don't know ;o) (:
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Jon M
11:48 pm | March 7, 2004
Actually, I've been reading the FoR and I can find several examples of SPARTAN and Spartan. Both Nyland and Del Rey are a little lax on that. I even found a typo.
Oh and Sage in case you don't speak Spanish earlier I said that, "it was a nice story and that I like it and I like seeing stories by people I know. Keep up the good work."
And so it is true in english.
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JJiggssaw
10:59 pm | March 7, 2004
Hey Sage just a small tip; it isn't SPARTAN its Spartan. Maybe you're mixing it with MJOLNIR. I was in doubt myself until I read the back of First Strike. Again, nice series, and if you're not going to kill off some characters you at least have to have some close calls in the first 5-7 chapters. And if I was writing the story (not that I am; no pressure) I would kill of one of the women after a close relationship beccause it makes (some) readers cry. Evoking emotion=good. ;)
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Thomas Harper
8:39 pm | March 7, 2004
i liked it. it actually brought me in and i stayed focus through out the whole thing. also ur format was nice and neat=:).
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Helljumper
5:46 pm | March 7, 2004
I'm not picking on him.
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CoLd BlooDed
5:35 am | March 7, 2004
Leave him alone, Helljumper. :P
You always gotta trust the author, if you don't...well, then guess you don't have to read the stories.
Good job, Sage, and I hope you don't disappoint, bring us some emotion!
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Sage Scorpion
4:41 am | March 7, 2004
dude, you're missing the point. I'm just trying to respond to your comment. I'm saying that I won't kill them off early, but possibly later. I don't know yet. I never said that they couldn't die, just that they won't in the first 5-7 chapters. And I can't change it now, and you'll just have to wait and see if you like it or not. Give it a few chapters, and see if you like it. You won't be able to tell after just one chapter.
But thanks for at least reading, and for sharing your opinion.
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Helljumper
4:03 am | March 7, 2004
if you can pull it off, do it. if your characters don't die off then, your story won't be realistic. if Spartans can die, then your characters can die too
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CoLd BlooDed
8:06 pm | March 6, 2004
My Shadow Ops? What Shadow Ops, do you mean my current series?
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Sage Scorpion
7:16 pm | March 6, 2004
Yeah, I know what you mean Helljumper. But the fact is, when most people write a story/series around a squad of Marines, they get the number of people wrong. Most infantry squads usually should contain 10-15 people. And I strive for accuracy. But, although there are alot of people, a few main characters will surface, and you should be able to guess who those are yourself. Also, I split them up into two "teams", which should allow for greater individualism within those teams, because they will rarely be in the same place at the same time. And I don't believe in killing off characters that I've spent so much time creating so quickly.
And yeah, about the Shadow Ops thing, i've tried to do a few things to distance me from that, most of which I can't tell you about yet, but I can tell you that there will be ABSOLUTELY ZERO FLOOD. I personally hate them, and there is no way that even a super-elite squad of badass marines can stand up to them, only SPARTANs would have a chance in hell. Thanks for the compliments and comments, all.
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ToFu
6:56 pm | March 6, 2004
As I said Cool Marines! u painted the characters so well n my head, I like ur writing friend...:)
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Helljumper
5:51 pm | March 6, 2004
I personally think there are too many characters for the reader to actaully too care about. I mean u can try, but i bet u that once they start dieing, we really won't care. They sound a lot like CoLd's Shadow Ops
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Awacar
5:41 pm | March 6, 2004
Jon M, Sage, por que escribido en el espanol?
Sorry, I couldn't help it. Great story, Sage. Me encanta.
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CoLd BlooDed
5:37 pm | March 6, 2004
Erm...bonjour. :P
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Jon M
3:42 pm | March 6, 2004
Que? Debe deicr, "Muchas gracias senores." Pero, no hay ningun preblema. Esta historia es muy bien, y me encanta a ver historias de los personas que me conozco. Continue el buen trabajo.
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Sage Scorpion
5:17 am | March 6, 2004
Thanks JJigg. Your's aren't so bad either. But yeah, I know what you mean. But, I had to set this one up like that, with all the boring descriptions so that I wouldn't have to switch gears in the middle of a combat scene to refer to the actions or remarks of a character. So, basically, you can expect all further chapters to be a mix of combat and plotline.
And lol about the condescending thing, I know EXACTLY what you mean. One of the very small reasons for writing this was that I knew that eventually I would be challenged to write something better than someone, a figurative writeoff, after a particularly criticizing comment. Hehe, now I've got it!
Thanks for the feedback, muchos gracias senors!
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JJiggssaw
1:52 am | March 6, 2004
OOOOOOOOh I wouldn't have thought your comments on most sories so unnaturally condescending (no offence;) if I knew you could write like THIS. This description paints a very vivid picture in my mind. Your structure is clean and your grammar is perfect. However, as much as it is nice to have such detail in a description in action the story gets clogged when you describe every move so watch out. All in all I loved it, my only slightly negative thing being a future warning. 5/5
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Sage Scorpion
1:09 am | March 6, 2004
I was gonna put it in something about that, but it was already running at about 56k, which is about 20 more than the requested limit in the submission form, and I was worried about it not getting put up. Thanks y'all for reading it.
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Whoever
9:33 pm | March 5, 2004
The amount of weapons, yes, is unreasonable but in a story thats fine. But to other dude you have to consider they have armor maybe strenght and agility inhancement like the SPARTANS.
Very good introdution 4/5
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Sage Scorpion
9:18 pm | March 5, 2004
Thanks for reading, I appreciate it. I know that this one was quite boring, but it was a big part of the series.
First, the title means something like "A Sudden Tomb For The Gods Themselves".
Second, i have no idea when this series will end, but it will be LONG. It will continue for quite some time, switching plots and storylines, so reading the beginning chapters will be very important.
And, to answer your question Snake, yes, I know that they carry alot of guns and weapons, but all of these guns are basically a fraction of what the "current" ones weigh, because they are made almost exclusively of alloys. Plus, the armor takes alot of the weight as well, and theses Marines are highly fit. But, still, just bear with me.
Thanks again for reading.
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Snake Solid 117
7:09 pm | March 5, 2004
Those guys sound like monsters. The amount of wepaons they carry is unreal. Even if they did caryy that much, where would the ammo for it go. Anyways, good story, loved the description of the soldiers and there realations to one another. This story sounds good, and I will definately read the next.
These guys sound like super G.I. Joes
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ToFu
6:00 pm | March 5, 2004
Cool Marines...indeed
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