hornet34
3:38 pm | August 29, 2003
Spend more time on your stories. A little more editing and elaboration would help make the story more fluid and enjoyable to read. I do like the how the story is from a private's perspective. 8.0/10
Kaboose
5:06 pm | August 27, 2003
Not bad...a few spelling and grammar errors, but besides that it was a great story. Looking forward to the next installment! 9/10
