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Comments for 'Halo: And its unsung heroes.' |
Pilot 415
11:24 pm | January 2, 2003
what the hell was that?
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Guilty Spark
8:24 pm | December 31, 2002
Some good parts and some not so good parts. Don't overdo the build up of characters - esp. the MC (everyone knows who he is) - instead, let the reader get to know them through their actions and words.
The ending was kind of abrupt. Will there be another chapter?
Keep trying.
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Iggins5000
7:54 pm | December 28, 2002
I didn't mean your paragraphs are good, i meant you need them, right now they're about non-existant.
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Iggins5000
7:48 pm | December 28, 2002
The writing is not that bad at the beginning (Though its quality goes downhill as the story goes on), the big problem is the dialogue and the way you characterize the Chief as emotionless and cruel, which is completely different than how he is portrayed in-game and in the novel.
And paragraphs are good.
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Sarge
7:07 pm | December 27, 2002
While I doubt that is the true Wado I must agree however, do keep trying friend.
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saturn
7:39 am | December 27, 2002
the title sucked so much i decided to read it. i stoped at, "let the games begin". i didnt kno whether i was reading bout halo or gladiator battles from that line. ill try to be more sublte than wado: this was not great but i encourage you to try again.
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wado
3:58 am | December 27, 2002
this sucks balls
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