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Comments for 'The Road to Zaxheoa: Prologue: Hell Takes Its Toll'



Nike
8:01 pm | December 23, 2003
Steele
3:51 PM | April 30, 2003
I'm only fifteen too. But I meant the Coporal called everyone, "son."

Oh, I see what you meant. Well...that was my own preference/quirk/whatever.
monitor101
7:10 pm | May 1, 2003
Dude 15 and I'm only 13.
Shadow Spartan
5:45 pm | April 30, 2003
yeah, im going crazy i think...meh, good stories everyone!!!!
Steele
2:51 pm | April 30, 2003
I'm only fifteen too. But I meant the Coporal called everyone, "son."
James Kinsella
1:05 am | April 30, 2003
are*
James Kinsella
1:01 am | April 30, 2003
I don't think you ate going crazy. I do know that some of the best writers(not me) come from unknown places. Think of it this way. At our age we haven't been completely corrupted by society. We still have original ideas, and the drive to implement them. I'm not saying the older folks don't, I just think that might be some of the reason.
Nike
8:29 pm | April 29, 2003
I think you're going crazy. :P :D
Shadow Spartan
7:57 pm | April 29, 2003
weird, with the way that all of you guys write, i was thinking you were all in your twenties and thirties...maybe im going crazy...oh well...10/10 Nike, well done young one ;)
Nike
6:09 pm | April 29, 2003
LOL
Traumatised Marine
5:13 pm | April 29, 2003
Good Lord! 11!? I too am 15 and I would have thought writers here would have been 13+.

Well you may write really well, but I think I'm afraid I'm just going to have to address you with condescending titles such as 'Sport', 'Sunshine' and 'Laddy!'



...I AM joking, don't worry.
Nike (Yet Again)
11:58 am | April 29, 2003
Goddamned HTML!! (Oh, sorry about that. My "evil" side took over).

Oh and, for people who don't know, I'm only 11. Yep. This was made by an 11 year-old.
Nike (Again)
11:56 am | April 29, 2003
A little bit of news for ya: I've posted the prologue (i)and(/i) Chapter 1 at this location:

(b)http://www.qslaboratory.com/forums/index.php?s=3a12017277223c98003871cf1aaa663b&act=ST&f=50&t=2114&st=0&#entry25718(/b)

Yes, I know I'm spamming, but if you can't wait for Chapter 1 to be posted tomorrow, go to that location, read it there, and post your comments here.

But Chapter 1 will be put up tomorrow so only bother if you're (i)really(/i) impatient.
Nike
11:53 am | April 29, 2003
A little bit of news for ya: I've posted the prologue [i]and[/i] Chapter 1 at this location:

[b]http://www.qslaboratory.com/forums/index.php?s=3a12017277223c98003871cf1aaa663b&act=ST&f=50&t=2114&st=0&#entry25718[/b]

Yes, I know I'm spamming, but if you can't wait for Chapter 1 to be posted tomorrow, go to that location, read it there, and post your comments here.

But Chapter 1 will be put up tomorrow so only bother if you're really impatient.
James Kinsella
12:12 am | April 29, 2003
I don't think that to many of us are too old(like in the thirties). I'm only fifteen so age kinda doesn't matter. The real thing is wether or not the story is good. Keep it up!
Nike
10:12 pm | April 28, 2003
I've just submitted Chapter 1. It has action in it, too, so it should be good. It's a bit longer then the prologue, as well.
monitor101
8:36 pm | April 28, 2003
Welcome back Nike its been awhile great story keep them coming!
GhostMouthZach
8:13 pm | April 28, 2003
Really good I noticed a Couple flaws (My storys suck anyway, thats what people told me so I dont know what I'M Talking about any way), but overall
good Job. 10/10.
Nike
7:01 pm | April 28, 2003
Well, to answer Steele's question, he really cared about his daughter, and he wouldn't want her to die. No matter who killed her.
James Kinsella
6:43 pm | April 28, 2003
I like it. Keep it up!
Arthur Wellesly
6:32 pm | April 28, 2003
Hey man, good story, I liked it AND I commented. I want to continue reading them :)
Steele
2:49 pm | April 28, 2003
8.5/10. Pretty good, but would a Corporal act so old?
John Morris
1:15 pm | April 28, 2003
BTW I just posted a new story, it should be posted today or tomorrow, it's short, but I would appreciate feedback, I'm hopeing this 1st person story will be a welcom break from the road to Earth series which I will finish in due time
Haok
2:24 am | April 28, 2003
and you will get your two comments. it just takes time.
Havok
2:24 am | April 28, 2003
great story so far. i dont know why so many eople complain about the gramar. unless it is hard to read because the spelling sucks so bad, dont say anything.
Nike
10:26 pm | April 27, 2003
Seriously, I will.
Nike
10:26 pm | April 27, 2003
C'mon people; if I don't get two more comments (from different people), I'll stop writing fan fiction.
Nike
4:21 pm | April 27, 2003
Oh, and by the way, that one part with the zombie eating Owens' face off came from House on Haunted Hill.
Nike
2:20 pm | April 27, 2003
Thanks.

I did notice some flaws (I knew about them before I sent this in; I just hadn't seen them at the time; they were kind of invisible).
John Morris
1:01 pm | April 27, 2003
Yeah you had a similar title but it went in a totally different direction, great description, I didn't notice any flaws, great. 10/10


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