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Comments for 'Halo: Captain Keyes Story Part 5' |
Red
2:47 am | April 17, 2003
What do you know I am right... Well, when i am alone you tell me to kiss your ass even though i lent this series more support than most of the comments here, but when there are others you stop it... Confusing...
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monitor101
6:43 pm | April 16, 2003
Diablo I think what the book says so thats what I think. I'm dropping this series.
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el_halo_diablo
4:30 pm | April 16, 2003
I agree with the people on not rushing, but it doesn't really matter in this part, because we all know what happens in this chapter without reading it. I sure hope you wont rush on the next one M101 because I want to see what you think happened to Keys.
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monitor101
4:03 am | April 16, 2003
Well this story isn't the best I'm sure most of you could agree. So I'm dropping this one and dtarting my next series.
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Red
3:20 am | April 16, 2003
I never said anything about indenting...
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Steele
9:59 pm | April 15, 2003
Yeah, you should take time to read over it even if you're in a hurry or got a time limit. Just come back later.
I had the same problem with my Defense of Earth series. I wanted to go on to a new series (I wanted to get the plot through for some one else took it, I'm still wondering why no one thought too). So on the last part I did a 'quickie,' I could have made it a lot better but I didn't.
I left the series open, so I could come back at a later date and finish it. But this is your series. This story gets an 7/10.
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monitor101
9:34 pm | April 15, 2003
I'm not telling you to kiss my ass I'm telling Red. Like I care any way.
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James Kinsella
7:30 pm | April 15, 2003
I didn't really like it. It was full of stuff we got in the flood book, and the spelling and grammar errors hurt. No offense, but if you want to drop this one and work on a new one youve got my full support.
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Traumatised Marine
6:59 pm | April 15, 2003
As the man on the Carlsberg advert would say;
"SHTOP! SHTOP! SHTOP! Vat are yoo doing!? Dis fic is not reddy yet! At Carlsberg, we only let yoo read it, ven it's reddy!"
If you find yourself rushing and ruining the fic because you want to write a new series, just drop this one.
It was not remarkable, I'm afraid. You might have added a bit of new info about the ride home in the Covie dropship, but instead it's all stuff we knew anyway.
Don't tell me to 'kiss your ass' because there was little praise here, just take it properly.
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monitor101
6:27 pm | April 15, 2003
I'm two chapters away from finishing this then I hope my next fic will make up for this one.
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monitor101
6:20 pm | April 15, 2003
Red you can kiss my ass! I rushed through this one because I had a time limit so don't lecture me about indenting, I tried but the damn thing just stayed as it was so don't bother to bring it up.
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Red
5:36 pm | April 15, 2003
Some typoes slowed me down a little reading this like your ehn towards the end. Took me a second to get it because of those. With that, and some gramatical errors to hint this towards me, I am lead to think that you are not using word or have accidentally disabled the spellcheck. You can reenable it within the language area. Storywise, this part was a problem. i would have continued it. Most Halo players already knew everything you wrote here, and I didn't find too much originality in this post, though I can admit that that was a reasonable place to end this one. However, that said I would have continued it to show players that you have new information as well. I would have placed a horizontal rule through where you say "to be continued" and I would have added your next post onto its end. However, neither of those are a clear win-win situation for both you and your readers. A longer post would chase some away, but a shorter one would bring more poeple, perhaps at the cost of quality. BUt, in the end, it is up to you, and this was a complete scene, albeit a scene that I already knew almost completely...
In closing I can say taht you should probably get someone to read over and check your fanfics before submitting them, that way you will have all the gramatical and spelling errors sorted out, and it wouldn't take more than twenty minutes to do, even if you did it yourself.
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