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Comments for 'Closing with the Enemy Chapter 6 Night Fighters'



monitor101
11:39 pm | December 11, 2003
Thanks for the comments keep them coming. Well Shade the plot is the battle for Echo Base and what went wrong and stuff.
SaGe ScOrPiOn
4:47 pm | December 9, 2003
i love this series almost as much as i love 'All Roads Lead to Sol...'. although some think that your story should have some kind of plot, and not just be a big battle, i heartily disagree. noone ever writes about a big battle between the Covenant and Humans, and it's never on even terms. i think people try too hard to put in a story in places where it isn't needed. i think it is refreshing to finally get a story about the actual happenings of a war. Covenant attack Humans, and are repulsed, Humans launch counterattack, and are repulsed. this would be boring if not for monitor101's ability to describe the inate goings-on of war, the quirks and the routine. all in all, 9.9/10
P.S.- the only reason it's not a 10/10 is because i gave 'All Roads Lead to Sol...' a 10/10, and this story just can't measure up to the standards of ARLtS. still great though!!
Chechen Fighter
1:03 am | December 9, 2003
Nice story, I like the grunts dialogue, very funny. Most people just paint them as stupid and unfunny. They are the most under rated character in Halo. I also like your use of mines in the earlier chapters. Keep it coming.
Agent Shade
7:52 pm | December 8, 2003
your new writing attributes continue to impress me. lots of action again, something i like to see, but is there an actual story behind this, or is it just a battle that is happening. keep them coming regardless monitor. you get my ever so special fan fiction forum thumbs up *gives Monitor thumbs up* yeah.....
BrutalArt
7:21 am | December 8, 2003
Good action. I like the idea of the blankets giving a cold signature and what followed. Looking forward to the next part.
monitor101
9:45 pm | December 7, 2003
Thanks for the comments. Okay that won't happen again lol.
monitor101
9:45 pm | December 7, 2003
Please keep the comments coming.
teemus
8:51 pm | December 7, 2003
I liked the story, you were very discriptive. The only thing i didnt like was the william and willson. I kept on forgeting who was who. 9.5/10 as well.
'Nosolee
5:32 pm | December 7, 2003
Very good, I like the way you create the atmosphere of tension of being pinned down by Shades. Some minor grammer/tense issues. The only real thing that confused me was the use of Wilson and Williams. I sort of forget whos who.
Othawise: 9.5/10
'Nosolee
5:26 pm | December 7, 2003
Yea, I'll comment, hold on...
monitor101
5:10 pm | December 7, 2003
So any comments?....Any at all? How about now?........Or maybe now?


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