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Comments for 'Urchins'



Auntie
3:51 am | October 28, 2003
Excellent short story. Made me want to read more about these characters. How bout a series? Keep writing, you have talent.
Walker
1:19 am | October 23, 2003
Wow, that was pretty awesome, yo. I think you have a serious future here. It did seem slightly played from Orson Scott Card's Ender's Shadow, but it had its differences. Only one question: how did they know what ammo fit what guns, and why didn't they check the ammo boxes and the guns to see? I'd imagine they're not that stupid. And the Prophets would probably have some kind of shielding or armor or guard, but hey, whatever floats your boat. 9.2/10.

Semper Fi

-Walker
Mainevent
7:57 pm | October 22, 2003
It's good and all, a fresh story, but how did he know what a prophet was?

Also, at first he didn't know what a brute was, but then he did. So make sure not to conflict like that.
Mainevent
7:57 pm | October 22, 2003
By good I mean really good, don't let the simple good fool you, good is good.
Jillybean
5:38 pm | October 22, 2003
I like this a lot - it's a great idea to have the freedom fighters, the orphans - the people that get left behind. Well I'm looking forward to reading more = only thing is - I would have liked to have seen more description in the action other than that - lovely.
Javier Fernandez-Vina
1:35 pm | October 22, 2003
great fic. But i don't think macdonalds would still be around.If they were the world would have fallen the them and their evil machicken for 99 cents.


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