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Comments for 'Halo: The Aftermath pt. 3/5' |
PBP
4:07 pm | February 10, 2004
Ahhhhh.....
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IAmDelta
9:54 pm | February 9, 2004
Not bad action wise, just watch your verb tenses (that problem seems to be running rampant around here). "Maybe they could get a few kills before they get killed." "Could get" is past, so it should be "got" at the end. Alternatively, "get" is present, so it should be "can get" at the beginning. Pick a tense and stick with it. Read your sentence to yourself, and if it sounds weird you probably have it wrong. Other than that, good job.
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