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Comments for 'The Plot Thickens'



spectre
11:56 am | May 2, 2004
Those damn grunts will never take me alive!

And where are all the new stories?
the angry two month old fungus filledham in the corner
4:01 am | May 2, 2004
Hey, I wet myself too!
the angry author
3:00 am | May 2, 2004
YOUR GOING TO GET A BEATING FROM A GROUP OF GRUNTS. Go get em boys.

I just wet myself, CAN'T RUN WITH THING ON BACK
spectre
2:33 am | May 2, 2004
That doesn't sound like much of a happy time
Marl
2:11 am | May 2, 2004
Throw me in, ya know, tied up in a sack surrounded by gold elites with sticks, using me for target practice.
the author
3:43 pm | May 1, 2004
STOP SPOILING MY PERFECT PLOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Nick Kang
12:34 pm | May 1, 2004
Well I think it's kinda obvious that he blows up later if he's got a nuke implanted into his stomach...lol

Although that would've been a cool team, like one member of each species. Like throw in a Brute and a Jackal...coooool.

NK
The Author
2:24 am | May 1, 2004
He blows up later
Slayer Boi
1:30 am | May 1, 2004
I liked it, although i am kinda sad that he turned out 2 be android. i think it would've been a cool team, elite, hunter, grunt and boy.
still, i think it is a gr8 story.
spectre
7:21 pm | April 30, 2004
I enjoyed the story, especially the little twist at the end.

And a story from the flood P.O.V. might not be so weird, Blackvalkeryie(however you spell it) did something along those lines in parts of his series "The Rise and Fall of the flood". And in "The Flood" Cpt.Keyes' mental battle with the flood is described, as well as a Helljumper's. Those where all pretty good.
MC's Cousin
1:01 pm | April 29, 2004
Pretty good, I must say. I liked this one. And since I liked it. I will help you out first.
You need to indent. I makes it flow more, and it looks better. To indent type [indent] where you want it to do as such.
bold put [b] infront of what you want bolded and [/b] where you want it to stop. For italics and underlining, replace the b with an "i" or "u", respectively.

Now for the story. I'm not so sure about the Elite beating a Brute. In First Strike, it said the Brutes could take down a Hunter. Sounds like more than a match for me. But as you put it, the Brute might have been to hih on itself to really do well in the fight, or you just...
Anyway, the whole Human is an android thing is pretty sweet. Although I think the Covies might have noticed that when they scanned him.
There is a little comedic aspect in there. Now, I never knew all species of Covies could speak English that well, or at all for that matter.

Signing Off


MCC
the author
12:16 pm | April 29, 2004
this is a series, and a human's point of view comes up later on, i am trying to ease the plot out, to try and make the stroy flow better

and a story about a flood would be just wierd
Hikaru-119
11:54 am | April 29, 2004
I'm not exactly the most fond of Covenant points of view, but overall it was a good read.
Nick Kang
11:44 am | April 29, 2004
Actually I was thinking of writing a story from a Combat Form's point of view.

Anyway, this story is getting kinda wierd. The detail and events kept me reading all the way through, which is good becuase I usually don't have the attention span to read long stories.

NK
Marl
1:41 am | April 29, 2004
Yeah, I can see it now, we right a story from a flood's mind.

I guy in green armor walked into the room. I jumped at him with a bunch of other flood. We popped and died horribly.

lol. Anyway, this is a good series. Keep righting good stories
Mainevent
1:28 am | April 29, 2004
I'm okay with the Covenant point of view. I like a mixture though. Nobody ever does it from a flood's point of view though.

I hate the flood, I'm just saying. It'd be interesting.
Helljumper
1:19 am | April 29, 2004
yea it was good and kept me reading all the way through, and i like the plot twists u had...

ODST
7.62
10:42 pm | April 28, 2004
great story man! great ending :)
'Nosolee
8:13 pm | April 28, 2004
I like Elites, I am one...
just kidding, hehe...I'm not THAT Halo crazed.
Elite-fan....
7:59 pm | April 28, 2004
Wow.... been a long time since i checked out this section (fan-fic).

Must say, really good writing keep it up!!

(Everyone loves nukes! Not as many love elites, but some do.)


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