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Comments for 'Sniper patrol group 06'



Havok
4:48 pm | July 23, 2003
ok nevermind. the story is posted today. SO GO READ IT!
Havok
2:40 pm | July 23, 2003
wow, sarge and Iskabibbl, you guys have been out of the loop for a long time. you should check out Foresaken Forefathers part X when it is posted tomorrow
Sarge
4:46 am | July 23, 2003
No i'm not saying i would just run in shooting but I wouldn't have an exact count of every grunt...
MadJackal
3:27 am | July 23, 2003
Good story, and I think that if your rifle fills with water, you have to clear the barrel of it and go through all kinds of junk to make sure it will fire perfectly. Not sure, didn't do any research on that one... but I enjoyed the story. The others are right about the speed and the descriptions. Good job.
Ishkabibbl
10:51 pm | July 22, 2003
I just went through all my earlier stories comments and I just realized that I've had the best authors I've read on HBO comment on my stories, sorta cool.
Ishkabibbl
4:21 pm | July 22, 2003
Well I didn't delve to deep into the standard firearms of today's armies. So I guess that part was wrong. Oh and for the head count, would you just randomly start hurling grenades and firing off your weapons without an idea on who is where?
Sarge
4:08 pm | July 22, 2003
Woah read some other stories not quite what we used to be eh? boosts to 78/100
Sarge
3:57 pm | July 22, 2003
Well since we have pistols now that can fill up with water and be fine don't you think in the future we wont have to many problems with that?

Also think about it if you were in a heated battle would you be taking head counts of the enemies...
"Alright I want all the grunts lined up here and the elites over there very good lets move people"

The story moved a bit too fast it was like zoooooooooooooooooooom then the general would start talking and it would just kill the action... It's like stop and go traffic...

Sarge gives it 65/100
Kaboose29 (a.k.a. Spookybanana29)
1:53 pm | July 22, 2003
Ishkabibbl, this was really good...9.5/10

Keep up the good work!
'Nosolee
11:06 am | July 22, 2003
Series or 1 shot thing? You need more explanation of the charcters and such. but anyways: 9.25/10
Ishkabibbl
3:25 am | July 22, 2003
I'm surprised anyone liked my old series...I suppose I'll speed up in writing them.
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2:11 am | July 22, 2003
Can i get some help how do i indent on my story?
Elfster
2:11 am | July 22, 2003
ya you havent posted any Ish's Story in a long time which is a lil dissapointing but this was pretty good 8 1/2/10
Ishkabibbl
1:12 am | July 22, 2003
This is a one shot thing, I'm just trying to get feed-back on my writing so when I finish up all my stories they'll be at their best.
Reel
1:12 am | July 22, 2003
Great story.But the other to are right you need a little more detial.But then again who am I to be telling you what to do when my story didn't get exepted.Anyways great story keep it up.
Steele
10:12 pm | July 21, 2003
Pretty good, just slow it down a bit. You know more description intermixed.


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