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Comments for 'The Second War: Prolouge (My triumphant comeback!!)'



i think your gay
5:30 am | December 30, 2003
your gay
Cyclone
10:18 pm | December 24, 2003
Very nicely done. I have an itchy feeling that the recovered Spartan is either John-117 or James-....whatever his number is. I lost my copy of TFoR, so I can't check for reference. Anyways, I'm waiting for the next one.
FOrunnER
8:53 pm | December 24, 2003
I was wondering if anybody was going to catch that. Yep, I had Titan A.E. In mind when I wrote about the humans situation.
Kyre
8:15 pm | December 24, 2003
Just read this. Great prolouge, wondering what's going to happen next... Somehow the intro to the humans reminded me VERY much about the movie Titan AE... with the chainsaw, mining facility, earth being glassed. I'm looking forward to reading the next one...
Knightmare(MM
12:20 pm | December 24, 2003
I know where you're coming from with the 'one reviewer' thing, only one person reviewed our latest submission. ;)

I think your story had, sane tongue aside, a shitznitzilicolously-lot-of-errors with grammar. The usual stuff aside, I'm wondering what the hell the prophecy is, and why the hell EVERYONE but ANYONE seems to know about it.

Especially the... 'mysterious aliens', who obviously have some knowledge of humanity and the SPARTANs, and I'm going to guess that the one they found in space is J-117 or one of his comrades.
The Covenant interactions- right on.
PRETTY good story, but personally I don't think it deserves a nine. It's the only rating people EVER give. It just doesn't help.
Alpha Lance
5:37 am | December 24, 2003
Nice come back ForunnER. And you stories have improved a lot. Remarkable work, can't wait for chapter 1. But I say this is grade A, close to being grade S. Nice work anyways.
FOrunnER
3:15 am | December 24, 2003
Oh and P.S. to Knightmare, I dont use out-of-tens anymore, I use letter grades. Its something people are more familiar with and it helps them better understand the rating. You could start doing that to if you want.
FOrunnER
2:46 am | December 24, 2003
Thanx guys. Sorry about all the grammer errors Knightmare, I'll fix that up. If you like this one, wait till the next one is out. It's way more mysterious and dramatic. And Mainevent, nope the aliens are not the Forerunner (that plot line has been used way to many times), I actually havn't thought up a name for them yet, but I have all the backround information for them.

Later, Peace out.
Helljumper
2:30 am | December 24, 2003
i love the detail. i can't wait for the next one
Mainevent
2:17 am | December 24, 2003
I think the mysterious Aliens aren't Forerunner.
GC-117
11:51 pm | December 23, 2003
Wow i like this subject choice. And you got me runnin through possibilities of where this story is goin. G/J
FOrunnER
10:57 pm | December 23, 2003
Thank you 'Nosolee
'Nosolee
10:12 pm | December 23, 2003
Nice, welcome back.
FOrunnER
8:08 pm | December 23, 2003
Thanx guys, I actually thought it kind of sucked but hey, if both you guys liked it I must have done something right.
Mainevent
7:34 pm | December 23, 2003
I liked it alot. Damn good comeback I must say. Your writing has improved tenfold. You should get writer's block more often.

lol
FOrunnER
7:05 pm | December 23, 2003
thanx
CovieKilla
6:38 pm | December 23, 2003
holy crap...damn HBO, said the page couldnt display everytime....grrrr....oh well, sorry bout the tripple post.
CovieKilla
6:31 pm | December 23, 2003
Great story, just one typo i noticed.

"But anybody with have a brain knew..." have should be HALF. Thats it. And heres something quite odd, my new fan fic has somethings much similar if not the same to this one. I bet when i post it I will be accused of stealing some things from this, but I will assure them I havent because I started it back in late november, early december...I just havent posted it yet. So dont bitch at me for stealing things if you think I have.

Back onto topic. Great story. 9/10.
CovieKilla
6:31 pm | December 23, 2003
Great story, just one typo i noticed.

"But anybody with have a brain knew..." have should be HALF. Thats it. And heres something quite odd, my new fan fic has somethings much similar if not the same to this one. I bet when i post it I will be accused of stealing some things from this, but I will assure them I havent because I started it back in late november, early december...I just havent posted it yet. So dont bitch at me for stealing things if you think I have.

Back onto topic. Great story. 9/10.
CovieKilla
6:31 pm | December 23, 2003
Great story, just one typo i noticed.

"But anybody with have a brain knew..." have should be HALF. Thats it. And heres something quite odd, my new fan fic has somethings much similar if not the same to this one. I bet when i post it I will be accused of stealing some things from this, but I will assure them I havent because I started it back in late november, early december...I just havent posted it yet. So dont bitch at me for stealing things if you think I have.

Back onto topic. Great story. 9/10.
FOrunnER
6:17 pm | December 23, 2003
shit, double posted
FOrunnER
6:15 pm | December 23, 2003
Hey guys. Im a little bit rusty, but things will pick up, promise. I actually dont really expect this to be a big hit, but Im having fun writing it so if you dont like it dont read it. Peace out.
FOrunnER
6:15 pm | December 23, 2003
Hey guys. Im a little bit rusty, but things will pick up, promise. I actually dont really expect this to be a big hit, but Im having fun writing it so if you dont like it dont read it. Peace out.


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