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Comments for 'Derailed Part 7'



Dispraiser
3:03 am | October 12, 2003
Nice grammar there.

I think you meant well in your little post, but you still managed to further prove my point. GRAMMAR.
monitor101
7:30 pm | October 10, 2003
Shut the fuck up Dispraiser your always severe about slow moving good grammer storys well fuck that.
Mainevent
3:59 pm | October 4, 2003
You mean covenant-fighting civilian midget clowns with missing appendages....
Walker
11:13 am | October 4, 2003
Hmm... Covenant-fighting civilian clowns... interesting theory!
Mainevent
1:51 am | October 4, 2003
I went to the circus tonight. (Totally unrelated note)

And I've seen 52 people in one warthog, they were all clowns, midget clowns, and several were missing limbs, but they were 52 none the less. It counts.
Dispraiser
9:34 pm | October 3, 2003
Aww.... A revenge post... That was one of the nagging problems in this fanfic's development. I have to make them rush, have weapons, and yet still be udnerequipped to fight through the Covenant lines. I also had to keep lots of civillians around. They will be fairly important to the drama of the end, though in reflection I notice that they will be replacable... Well, just know that that's one of the things that was pissing me off about that fanfic, but it's not the first illogic in this series.

Big trailers maybe?
monitor101
9:23 pm | October 3, 2003
Hey Dispraiser just wanted to say that that comment you posted on the Plague comments is bullshit I'm not a suck baby.
Walker
8:00 pm | October 3, 2003
Again, this was the perfect piece. Top ten series on HBO for sure. Just one comment, though... question, actually:

HOW THE HECK DO YOU FIT 52 PEOPLE IN ONE WARTHOG?!
Dispraiser
7:24 pm | October 3, 2003
An odd double post...
Dispraiser
7:19 pm | October 3, 2003
Nope, I found a sentence I didn't like when I reread it. I'm serious... I always have these little glitches.
Dispraiser
7:19 pm | October 3, 2003
Wow.
Mainevent
7:10 pm | October 3, 2003
I think you reached perfection.


So are you happy now?

Can all the bitching end?

Who shot JR?
Wado
5:13 pm | October 3, 2003
Fantastic Dispraiser!

Sadly now I cannot advise you more, you have surpassed my ability to make comments that will help improve your writing. Perhaps this was just a fluke and once again I will be able to write long constructive comments on future stories of yours. One can only hope.

Again, excellent, you have done well.

BTW: check out http://www.bungie.net/perlbin/blam.pl?file=/fanclub/7186


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