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Comments for 'The Great Elite' |
kyle,cory,crazy pants, scooby doo, and i'm not cory
2:15 am | August 24, 2003
I spell horrible also
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Kyle
2:06 am | August 24, 2003
ok. I admit it. I am the author. Kyle nor cory is my real name though. well niether is the other three iether. Im actually a famous writer and write some of the best books in the world! Ok, maybe not that big. i won't tell you my real name though. I just decided to try somethoing horrible. well, now ill get back to my mexica hat dance. I cacharacha!!!!
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Krieg
7:08 pm | March 31, 2003
This was the most incoherent story ive ever read. It was too 'and then the marine died but the MC shot all the Elites and saved the day'. Not very good but work on it and maybe it could improve.
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Dispraiser
8:46 pm | January 10, 2003
Also, learn to spell! I couldn't tell what you meant half the time in the end! Skeeded? Imbarrased (that one I got...). Also never say your stories are good, even if you use an alter ego, you make yourself into an infomercial then, and no one wants taht...
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Dispraiser
8:08 pm | January 9, 2003
I wrote a really long reply that buetified what I was saying, but lost it somehow, so here it is. Plain and simple, write a story differnt taht you speak. There is converstional chatter eg slang like Mc (and even if you use it, at least use MC). It needs originality. It needs to be something taht you wo0uld want to read. Though this would be an ok campfire story becase you are saying it rather than reading it, try to stick with formality, eg. the lack of suckiness and the lack of slang. But keep writing, tom clancy says to do so.
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Mutated Elite
7:41 pm | January 3, 2003
Needs a LOT of improvement
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Locke
4:02 pm | December 31, 2002
I admit this was OK, but the 3 comments below me are so obviously from Cory.They were all posotive, each posted 2 minutes apart, and in the same 6 minutes.
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I'm not Cory
10:14 pm | December 30, 2002
Smelly pants. call me cactus jack or whatever you like, but its pretty darn good,. i admit it, i cried!!
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Scooby Doo
10:12 pm | December 30, 2002
This is the very best story ever. it should be published. i want my SCOOBY SNACKS! now please. P.S.
I'm not the author, which is some name i never heard of, Cory.
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cRAZY pANTS
10:09 pm | December 30, 2002
This story makes me want to do the mexican hat dance. i like. i cacharacha!!!!!!
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saturn
9:36 pm | December 30, 2002
for all we know..."Kyle" could be u kno who... but if u need the encourgement im here to read the next one if u would like. dont depair, it is ur first time but doesnt have to be ur last.
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cory
3:49 pm | December 30, 2002
I agree with Kyle, im the author so it must be good
even know the title wasn't good. its my very first
time to write a story.
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Psycho
12:31 pm | December 30, 2002
Needs more details
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Kyle
3:15 am | December 30, 2002
The best story i have ever read, period
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Sarge
7:09 pm | December 27, 2002
When theirs an error in the first sentence it completely turns me away from the story.
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saturn
7:32 am | December 27, 2002
this was such a...bad...title, i decided to read the first sentences. the law of opposites... well anyways, the only time writing in such a casual manner is appropiate is for halo comidies. you have some critical readers and writers here, bump it up a notch. however, please do not be discouraged. i point out errors, notice i didnt say the whole thing was hopeless. this means that if yoiu keep writing, you will get better and more ppl will like. dont stop here.
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Spartan 3
2:48 pm | December 26, 2002
Learn to create coherent sentences.
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