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Comments for 'Earth under siege:Part Two' |
Shogun
4:19 am | May 2, 2004
Dude are you like fucking retarded? Hit the grammar books buddy!
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Marl
9:16 pm | May 1, 2004
As said before, you need to work on spelling and grammar. Also, you use too much dialog.
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Nick Kang
1:46 pm | May 1, 2004
You do need to work on your grammar a LOT. And you need more detail. Also, it go kinda repetitive, like with all of the plasma swords. And the spelling could be polished.
NK
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Mainevent
11:40 am | April 30, 2004
Serious grammar problems. Work on tense changes, word endings, and spelling.
And the MC doesn't use slang. He doesn't have time for it.
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Anonymous
11:09 am | April 30, 2004
hi
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SeverianofUrth
8:58 pm | April 29, 2004
Hmm... I always thought that the Chief always spoke in clear, concise sentences, never using any "Slangs" or whatnot. I highly doubt he'll say something like "Let's get these freaking freaks off Earth" or something like that. Also, the paragraphs aren't too structured; and it was sometime too hard to follow, along with the fact that there are way too many conversations.
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