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Comments for 'Halo: The Battle Within. Chapter 3' |
CoLd BlooDed
5:33 am | March 7, 2004
Stories don't need action to be interesting. Look at stories by Mainevent, Walker, SOS.Odin, Helljumper, etc. if you want to see stories that are interesting despite the lack of action.
I'm usually talking about the first chapter.
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Helljumper
4:00 am | March 7, 2004
Its boring and u don't describe anything. Also privates are a Marine rank not Navy. Naval ships have Navy personel running them. Bridge personel are high ranking ensigns adn officers.
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The Collector
12:58 pm | March 6, 2004
Not a bad story. Lil boy keys being a captain @ what seems like a young age is kinda gruff and a tad unrealistic. I does happen though. Anyways... All in all the story had to many "up and downs." It would get interesting only to be let down just a few sentences later. Work and on that and reshape your story and i'll bet u it'll be gr8
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B-Man
5:23 am | March 6, 2004
The action picks up next chapter..
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B-Man
2:24 pm | March 5, 2004
Man, guys, I'm sorry, I keep noticing the wrong words in the wrong place. I need to have peoplse proof read it for me...sorry guys...
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