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Comments for 'Project: Shadow Spartan, Chapter 11'



pooman
4:10 pm | August 6, 2003
so am i still wating for this world to stop hating cant find a good reason cant find hope to belive in.......... drop dead a bullit to my head your words are like a gun in hand we cant change the state of the nation we just need some motavation revive the seat of conviction just like a more contridiction so tell me wut would you say id say its time today so am i still wating for this world to stop hating cant find a good reason cant find hope to belive in..... anthrax and understanding your the first one to jump in line except for wut i belive in but whoes left to stop the bleeding how far will we take this its not hard to see through the fakeness so tell me wut would you say id say its time today so am i still wating for this world to stop hating cant find a good reason cant find hope to belive this cant last last forevere time wont make things better i feel so alone cant help myself and no1 knows this kiss is worthless to me ..................... SO........................ we head we die were the first ones to jump in line this will to hell and wut we fell so am i still wating for this world to stop hating cant find a good reason cant find hope to belive, so am i still wating for this world to stop hating cant find a good reason for this world to belive
pooman
3:20 pm | August 6, 2003
yep no hope
scope
3:03 pm | August 6, 2003
Monitor has lost it, big time.
Agent Shade
11:15 am | August 6, 2003
Hawk, what did you think of my story?
Hawk7886
7:51 am | August 6, 2003
I love your story, I will post comments on my favorites out of the series tomorrow. It's nice and long, indents are as needed, and you break up the story to show different veiw points. I did find errors though. You ready?

"Sam's weapon stopped fired and an empty ammo clip fell into the floor."


"You've killed my friends, I'm going to fucking ripe your own head off!"


"Buenos Noches amigo" he said. Sam knelt beside him. He had been hit by a shotgun round above the hip and was covered with shrapnel.

"You okay?" he asked. Jose coughed up some more blood.

"I look bad, but I'll make it mi amigo" he said.

Why would he say "Good Nights" in Spanish and then say he would be ok? In most movies, when they say good night, they die.

"I AM NO BEATEN, I ALWAYS WIN!"

Take this all very lightly, I wasn't trying to attack you. This is a very good story, 10/10
Agent Shade
2:26 am | August 6, 2003
"queers sexually shaded shady"

holy crap monitor, i think you are starting to lose it HAHAHAHAHAHA
Alpha Lance
1:35 am | August 6, 2003
Monitor your a funcking,cocksuckin,assclown.
monitor101
1:06 am | August 6, 2003
Theres never hope for me when it comes to queers sexually shaded shady.
Hawk7886
10:19 pm | August 5, 2003
I thought your name sounded familiar . . . What dialect is it in? I don't know how to speak or write Filipino, I just always hear kids at school speaking it. I always said your name with a Filipinio accent. I know what it sounds like, having many Filipino friends.
Shinai Purugganan x5!
8:44 pm | August 5, 2003
Shinai Purugganan. Shinai Purugganan. Shinai Purugganan. Shinai Purugganan. Shinai Purugganan. You know, that's really hard to do. I've had trouble trying to say just Purugganan. It's not that easy to speak Filipino you know! Much harder being one! Oh and, yeah I agree with pooman. Don't make Sam die, but a little surprize wouldn't hurt. No problem on the comments.
pooman
3:12 pm | August 5, 2003
dont listen to anoymous dont make sam die
Steele
1:05 pm | August 5, 2003
David Elliot? Doesn't he play Rabb on Jag??
Anonymous
8:20 am | August 5, 2003
Make Josh stab sam with the other knife he got then josh slips off the platform, grabs laura and they both die then sam dies of the wound.
Agent Shade
9:12 pm | August 4, 2003
David Elliott? i didn't know he was a famous person...sorry, and thank you Shinai Purugganan (say that five times fast) lol, appreciate the comments
Shinai Purugganan
8:18 pm | August 4, 2003
There were a couple mistakes, but we all have our typos. I can't think of anything that would really make it better. Excellent job on your rendition of Project Shadow Spartan, from the beginning all the way up to the end. Just can't wait to see how it all winds up. And thanks for commenting on O.C. Tango Red; appreciate it.
Wiley
5:56 pm | August 4, 2003
What the...David Elliot? He's that dude on MSNBC! You killed him, you bastard!

oh, and 9.5/10
Agent Shade
5:40 pm | August 4, 2003
gracias amigos
scope
4:14 pm | August 4, 2003
10/10 I. LOVE. THIS.
Alpha Lance
3:27 pm | August 4, 2003
KICK ASS!Kick ass!That was a good fanfic essay.
Agent Shade
11:58 am | August 4, 2003
you just typed a bunch of pointless shit about me and yet you still comment on my story...maybe there is hope for you monitor, thank you
Taze
4:46 am | August 4, 2003
Great story and i aprreciate there finally being a hispanic in a fan fic,lol.10/10
Agent Shade
12:36 am | August 4, 2003
there will be, in the final chapter, it's basically a huge battle between the two of them
Elfster
12:09 am | August 4, 2003
ya aside from that mistake its awesome. There needs to be a real big battle between Sam and Josh.
monitor101
10:21 pm | August 3, 2003
Good 10/10
Agent Shade
9:57 pm | August 3, 2003
shit, my bad, thanks guys
pooman
9:39 pm | August 3, 2003
ya i forgot about that part lol
Helljumper
9:30 pm | August 3, 2003
Lol pooman, the othr funny prt was Monty python lol
neways, great stuff 10/10
Helljumper
9:30 pm | August 3, 2003
Lol pooman, the othr funny prt was Monty python lol
neways, great stuff 10/10
pooman
8:38 pm | August 3, 2003
cool story, but i caught a mistake...... "I AM NO BEATEN, I ALWAYS WIN!" lol 10/10


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