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Comments for 'Beautiful Death'



Flu
12:44 pm | March 23, 2004
There ya go. I know you guys can see the difference between the construction of this poem and some others right??

Nice use of symmetry. Like Cold said, rhythm was good. Meter..well...it does have some internal consistency within most stanzas, and that's great.

There is a second level to this piece that a lot of the poetry here doesn't have. Nice Job ToFu
Thomas Harper
12:08 pm | March 10, 2004
now thats a good poem. nice job man! deffintley keep it up! =:D
German_Spartan
6:36 pm | March 9, 2004
Ah! Your writing is soothing to me, i like. Write more poems u do good!
Awacar
7:09 am | March 9, 2004
I like. The short senences really gives this poem a lot of flow.

Good work.
ToFu
8:53 pm | March 8, 2004
Dudette? lol I'll have to use that Alucard, Well thx my fellow readers, I'm glad u all enjoy this poem i wrote in just 2 minutes. I think I'll write another one, RIGHT NOW!
theramb!er
8:51 pm | March 8, 2004
damn its been to long since I posted a poem, i should get on that.
Lost_Patriot
8:17 pm | March 8, 2004
Well, ive seen better poems, but i have to say ur poems good. Reminds me of japanese death poems.

Not bad, i suppose
HiT_MaN
8:15 pm | March 8, 2004
Yo whats up again TOFU! what it be like, my asian friend? Man your poem is very good. I like it alot keep it up borther!
anon_chick
7:39 pm | March 8, 2004
Hey, good stuff! I liked the play on words. Sometimes your grammar was incorrect, but I felt I understood the meaning of the poem. It's sad... war has its toll. :) well, keep it up!
Alucard
6:58 pm | March 8, 2004
Hey dude, whats up man your poem is touching good work dudette!
CoLd BlooDed
4:05 pm | March 8, 2004
I liked it, I also liked the rhythm to it as well. Good job, ToFu, keep it up.


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