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Comments for 'Fight or Flight: Chapter One'



teemus
3:36 pm | November 27, 2003
srry bout he commas. this is one of my first storys so keep teh comments coming
Matty
1:43 am | November 27, 2003
Hey sumeet. cool just like u told me it would be. and all the other people who said it was not original i have to disagree.
Christian Sisson
2:24 pm | November 25, 2003
I thought it was very cool. The radio calls in the begining were so exciting. A few grammer mistakes, but you could hardly recoginze them. See my fan fic. It is called The Discovery. I have chapters 1 & 2 written
Steele
1:16 am | November 25, 2003
It was decent, though not too original.

Do you have a phobia on 'commas?'

Because I don't believe I saw a single one (exaggeration) in your story.

You need to put one before and after someone says something:

Bob said, "Who cares?"

"I do," said Jill.

Another time to put commas:

He started screaming, his voice hoarse.


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