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Comments for 'Hitting Home: Siege (Chapter 2)'



The NEW Zak
1:53 am | July 10, 2004
Ha! Ha! Ha! Two dads and a chemistry set. THAT was a good one! Ha! Ha! Ha! [NO SARCASM]


The NEW Zak
Jessi-Kins
12:50 am | July 10, 2004
Whoa...spanish spartan, why don't you just fuck the hell off...jeez, just because i'm a girl, and you can't get one, just because i can get pregnant, and you can't impregnate anybody, and just because your mom won't be you're slave doesn't mean you have to take your anger out on me...ooh, whoops, i forgot, you don't have a mom...you have two dads and a chemistry set...faggot, now leave me alone you SOB...

Well, i think that's enough for my little outburst, sry people, this doesn't happen alot for me...

JeSsI-kIns ^.^
CoLd BlooDed
8:11 pm | July 9, 2004
Wow, I think we should just ignore him. HBO is getting bloodthirsty...
GangstaPimpDaddy
11:36 am | July 8, 2004
I would jump his scrawny ass.
System Failure
10:05 pm | July 7, 2004
Sorry bout that,

If I ever saw Spanish Spartan on the street, my black ass and the rest of my "minority" friends would fuck him up. And once we find where he lives, we would do that every day, foever, and ever, and ever, and ever.
-System-
System Failure
10:03 pm | July 7, 2004
if i ever saw S
Awacar
8:24 pm | July 7, 2004
I DONT WANT ANY DUMBASSES ON THIS SITE. I REALLY DONT LIKE spanish spartan EITHER. BUT ITS HARD TO FIND OUT WHO HE IS. HE SHOULD STAY HOME AND HE ALSO SHOULD GO BACK TO HIS ASS WORLD OF CRAPHOLES.

spanish spartan must be an idiot. idiots are dumb and aren't worthy to be anyones slave.
CoLd BlooDed
7:42 pm | July 7, 2004
Spanish, if I ever saw you in person - you'd better believe I'd get people to kick the living hell out of your body. You motherfucking sexist bastard.
Spacefan
12:39 pm | July 7, 2004
As far as spanish spartan is concerned, there is alway one in every bunch--go ask Zen Lon about that on the Halo portion of Fanfiction Net. I'm not sure where these nitwits come from...

On the spelling and grammar errors. I write technical reports for a living. Spell checkers can't catch the grammaticals. A trick I use is to read what I write aloud. You will be amazed at how much your writing will improve.
The NEW Zak
7:30 pm | July 6, 2004
Yeah, really Spanish Spartan, you should STFU.
Nick Kang
10:46 am | July 6, 2004
STFU spanish spartan. Girls and Minorities have every right to be here. I hope you never get married and have kids, 'cause that would make an already failing world worse.

Oh and great story Shifty, I normally don't like 1st person stories that much, but you captured the thoughts and emotions of the guy so well...looking forward to the next one.

NK
spanish spartan
3:25 am | July 5, 2004
I DONT WANT ANY GIRLS ON THIS SITE. I DONT REALLY LIKE MINORITIES EITHER. BUT ITS HARD TO FIND OUT WHO THEY ARE.WOMEN SHOULD STAY HOME AND MINORITIES SHOULD GO BACK TO THEIR 3RD WORLD CRAPHOLES.
spanish spartan
3:23 am | July 5, 2004
Jessica must be a female. females are weak and should only be man,s slave.
The Collector
8:11 pm | July 4, 2004
*Clap* *Clap* *Clap* Well Done trooper 'I'm not scared' of the future. Keep writing like this and i bet u'll be among the best fan fic writers on here.
Thomas
2:58 pm | July 4, 2004
well done*** oops my bad
Thomas
2:58 pm | July 4, 2004
well down.
Jessica
11:42 am | July 3, 2004
Ahhhhh!! Whoops, Sowwie bout the double post...heh...^.^

Jess
Jessica
11:42 am | July 3, 2004
Whoa, when i read your name, i thought it said Shitty..
Jessica
11:42 am | July 3, 2004
Whoa, when i read your name, i thought it said Shitty..
Shifty
7:55 am | July 2, 2004
Thank guys, I'm going to crank out the next one very soon. I do run spellcheck, and look over it twice but there is always something that the spellcheck cant recognize, or something that just slips my mind.
Thanks again.

Shifty
Chuckles
5:40 am | July 2, 2004
This was excellent. I haven't found anything here more readable. Allow me to BEG you to use a spellchecker--when someone can write a story as good as you can (and that is hard) don't let it get tainted by bad spelling when you can just check it beforehand (and that is easy).

Very well done.

C.T. Clown
russ687
2:13 am | July 2, 2004
This is the writing of a truly good author, excellent job. You portay the horrible war effects on humans and how their emotions begin going array.

Hats off to you
Slit Throat
2:00 am | July 2, 2004
Words fail me.
343 Salty Beans
1:46 am | July 2, 2004
A few punctuation and spelling errors, but good job. I don't normally like first person stories, but you did great. Only bad thing I noticed is that you were repetitive with the word 'Elite'.

Anyhoo, good job. I liked the length...if only I had the energy to type that much.

343SB
Spacefan
8:38 pm | July 1, 2004
Wow! You have a gift for expressing the emotions of combat--fear, loathing, etc. Love it...keep the chapters coming.
Helljumper
8:29 pm | July 1, 2004
Really good. Loved the action and descriptions. Good job with the ODSt. See people bitching bout how I respond to their crappy ODST stories, but it pays off. People are getting the point.

ODST


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