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Comments for 'Better Off Dead Part 2 The Siege'



Sergeant B
6:52 pm | September 15, 2003
I said shut the hell up to you assfreak keith bastard!
Walker
1:48 am | September 14, 2003
MasterGrunt, try this, because I learned long ago it's the only way to see my own comments: after you post, go to Fanfic, then back to the story and click "refresh" then go back to whatever you were doing and the next time you check your comment will be there.
MasterGrunt
3:27 pm | September 13, 2003
Fine story. I liked how the elites refered to the humans as demons. Word of caution, don't focus to much on the MC in the next story. That can sometimes make a story crummy.
MasterGrunt
3:27 pm | September 13, 2003
Fine story. I liked how the elite refered to the humans as demons. Word of caution however don't use the Mc too much in the next story. That can sometimes make a story crummy. Judging by your style I don't thinnk that will so I am not really concerned. Keep up the great work. By the way I think some is out for my blood. A lot of my comments don't get posted and they're not real offensive or anything. Maybe Louis doesn't like me.
Mastergrunt
3:27 pm | September 13, 2003
Fine story. I like how yoou refered to the humans as demons. Just don't MC to much.
MasterGrunt
3:27 pm | September 13, 2003
cool story.
Vi3tl3l3oi 023(Return of CPT CRAPPER)
2:22 am | September 13, 2003
hmm... fine... chop up the paragraphs... more organized.
Alpha Lance
9:09 pm | September 12, 2003
Wow! I think Sergant B starting to turn himself around. I'm starting to reaspect you again, but slowly. And Vi3tl3l3oi 023(Return of CPT CRAPPER), back off. He is trying, and give him some support, support will make him a better writter. And Angel, that is what you want to be called, right. But anyways, don't go down to his level by calling him a 'Bloody Dumbshit.' So just keep your cool, and just egnore him. That helps, and please chop yp the paragraphs, it's to bunch up and hard to read. And keep it up. (7.8/10) for the grammer errors.
Sergeant B
8:18 pm | September 12, 2003
Hey Ilovebungie. I liked it. It was okay. But your spelling and grammar is alittle off man. And PLEASE make paragraphs man. It is sometimes really hard to read when it is all bunched up together dude. And don't say Vi..whatever, don't call him a stupid bloody dumbshit!
Anonymous
1:35 pm | September 12, 2003
If you cant read it your not very intelligent are you? Bloody dumbshit.
Vi3tl3l3oi 023(Return of CPT CRAPPER)
3:21 am | September 12, 2003
geez.... PARAGRAPHS! make paragraphs.... not a large load of shitty ass one paragraph.
DIspraiser
8:56 pm | September 11, 2003
I love your formatting. The blob of text is very stylishly unreadable.
GreenMJOLNIR
3:23 pm | September 11, 2003
What is up with the name copying of the funny 80's movie?


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