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Comments for 'Chapter Two - Departing Twilight'



Gordi
11:04 am | October 12, 2001
Thanks, Jester :) I noticed the spelling of 'chase' *AFTER* it had been submitted, whoops.Anyway, I never exactly had the 'ear' for character dialogue, or anything relating to them, in my opinion anyway. Have to work on that =p
vector40
11:27 am | October 11, 2001
Say...Not bad... :)
Mr. Bill Jr. V
11:26 am | October 11, 2001
I am at a loss of words. A simply excelelnt story. Little more can be said. I wont sk you to keep it up...... (But if you can then feel free to :-D ). I will glady follow you inot the abyss any day!
CrystyPyro
11:18 am | October 11, 2001
this work is one hell of a pice of fan fiction.and serial killa i think you should post your old fiction again =)its almost as good i think.not as detailed maybe but still good.anyway im straying this was good reading waiting ancuasly for more.
Jester (idiocy)
3:54 am | October 11, 2001
Evidentally, when you hit refresh, it sends your comment again. WHOOHOO! Sorry.
Jester
3:27 am | October 11, 2001
When they reach Pillar of Autumn, it seemed almost Starship Trooperish (which I like). Anyway, it was another great piece of work. My only suggestion is to watch out for introducing a bunch of characters (escpecially their names) at once, cause it gets a little confusing.Oh yeah, and you missed spelled "chase" at the end ;-)Keep up the good work.
Jester
3:27 am | October 11, 2001
When they reach Pillar of Autumn, it seemed almost Starship Trooperish (which I like). Anyway, it was another great piece of work. My only suggestion is to watch out for introducing a bunch of characters (escpecially their names) at once, cause it gets a little confusing.Oh yeah, and you missed spelled "chase" at the end ;-)Keep up the good work.
The Tru7h
12:23 am | October 11, 2001
Mean Marathon connection if im not mistaken, Greath piece of text too, id publish my own FF if my spelling wasent so bad:)if 7 is the truth then the tru7h can only be seven.
Arch Angel
9:12 pm | October 10, 2001
Nice, that's gotta be one of the best in Fan Fiction.
Gunship
7:10 pm | October 10, 2001
Very nice, very nice indeed.Don't go rushing to land on halo, I like this capital ship storyline too much. Makes me want to write that Star wars Cap ship story thats been kicking round my head, along with half a million other useless peices of junk. When will someone get round to creating a "thinkwritemachine"Keep up the good work!
Bsotizz
7:10 pm | October 10, 2001
Woooooooooooohaaaaaaaa cool storie.... KEEP IT UP MAN !
$erial-ki!!A
6:11 pm | October 10, 2001
Wow. The matching of verse and prose is stronger than I have ever seen it in fan fiction, and you seamlessly integrate a universe of information into your piece. Keep up the work and I can't wait to hear you describe a battle on HALO.--$erial-ki!!A


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