vector40
2:50 am | February 13, 2002
j00 movin' in on me game, matey?:) Very good, very good, very good, indeed. Few points. Proofreading would be great. I know it's a tempting to just send them off once their finished, but it can double a story's readibility to wait a day, look over it, and seriously edit it... if not more. I think it would be cool if, when the Spartans are "capping", you wrote their conversation in some different sort of format... you know? Just something to show that it's a special conversation. Even something inane like bold would be fine. Rendezvous is not a compound word :) They're not actually called Bobs. They're Marines. We just call them Bobs sometimes because we're lazy. Anyway, like I said, great job :) Definitely keep it up, I want to hear more. -lord Vexalot
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