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Comments for 'The Harvest Campaign Chapter 3'



SaGe ScOrPiOn
4:05 pm | December 3, 2003
Not bad, not bad at all. There are a few grammatical errors, so be more aware of those. Just because you run spell check, doesn't mean that the words fit in the sentence, it just tells you if it's a word or not. And you still need more character development. All in all, about a 6 or 7 out of 10.
teemus
11:48 pm | December 2, 2003
I like the story, a few grammer mistakes, but just stuff you can fix easily. Keep it up.
witelancer
7:39 pm | December 2, 2003
Not bad overall. A few slipups grammatically, and the dialogue could be better... "Captiain, I'm being sliced into".. lol. do you really think an AI would say that? jw.
it's an interesting little story, though.
8/10


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