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Comments for 'The Rebel: Just One of Those Days'



Awacar
2:19 pm | December 7, 2003
WIH! That's enough, you stupid impersonator that's mudthrowing Shade, show yourself! And yes I do know that you'll die if you see sunshine...
Agent Shade
5:24 am | December 7, 2003
Fuck u guys, im gonna suck my moms pussy. :-O
SOS.Odin
5:37 pm | December 6, 2003
yeah im writing one more chapt
imma see how that one goes
preciate anyone who reads and comments on my stuff
but i just might start reading only
JCDenton
4:23 pm | December 6, 2003
BTW, i paused my fan fiction till halo 2 comes out or my story wont be like 'after halo2' and I gotta collect data about those Brutes, and second, im repairing a old PC so it can go online... so I wont quit for allways...just for collecting data. and I hope more people will react on my fanfics then.

cya till halo2
CovieKilla
5:53 am | December 6, 2003
I read your stuff Odin...Neverland is kickass so far...dont leave yet...At least not until I figure out what happens lol...
SOS.Odin
4:52 am | December 6, 2003
good job
good idea
pimp writin
im thinkin bout
ceasing from
fan ficin
just dont have many readers
but main and walker read it
thanks guys
gl with your stuff elfster
peace out ppl
Mainevent
3:18 am | December 6, 2003
That's it, who took my Idea?
Jamirus99
8:10 pm | December 5, 2003
Damn this computer...I know I put "Jamirus99" in that "From" field.

Anyhoo, the below is from me.
Anonymous
8:05 pm | December 5, 2003
"Frantically trying to drive away, it collided with the tank and sent the driver soaring into the air, but before he hit the ground, he had a hole the size of a ping pong ball in his chest, cutting straight through part of his spinal cord. The driver of the Ghost quickly manuevered into a position where they were completely shielded by the front of the ghost and began a barrage of plasma fire on the small hill. With one bullet left she pulled the pin on a plasma grenade and lobbed it towards the lone Ghost. The driver ripped the controls to the side as hard as he could, leaning out the side of the Ghost.

Seeing her opportunity, she made good use of her last bullet, but it was only a glancing blow to the helmet. Still, it was enough to knock them out of the Ghost. As the driver toppled out sideways, the Ghost crashed to the ground ontop of their legs and they screamed out in agony as the vehicle crushed everything beneath it. As she put her last clip into the rifle she looked at the score"

How are multiple people in one ghost?

Also, there's never any mention about shrapnel with rockets: you DO know that the explosion of a rocket is harmful, but that the main damage will come from shrapnel from the casing? And therefore more than "rocks" should be flying.

Minor grammar mistakes with commas. Why do so many people not know how to use them, and what should be used instead?

The story is coming along slowly, too. What's the purpose of all these things? Will Colt and Co. ever see REAL combat?
Myth
3:44 pm | December 5, 2003
bout time you came back, it was good, confusing to some extent but good.
duckfoot
11:39 am | December 5, 2003
very, very good (apart from the blood 'glutch' thing.


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