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Comments for 'Chapter Two: Stranded Eagle' |
Blue Jaguar
4:44 pm | August 30, 2003
most of the problems with it not being indented and it being a big jumble will be fixed by chapter 4, sorry, i had submitted chapter 3 before i realized the problem.
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Walker
1:30 am | August 30, 2003
pretty good. 9.5/10
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Walker
1:30 am | August 30, 2003
pretty good, just next time make paragraphs when there is a break in the story and whenever someone new talks. it gets annoying to read one big jumble of words. 9.5/10.
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Blue Jaguar
7:35 pm | August 27, 2003
just some quick explanations of things. The outpost they are at, also the name of the series, Outpost SA-118, if didnt notice already, or just didnt make the connection, SA stands for South America, which is where the battle takes place. The actual volcano the base is in does not exist, but if it did, it would be about 500 miles northwest of Brasilia, the capital of Brazil, Alcantara is the Brazillian space launch base, which in the story is the major Air base in South America, and Caracas is the capital of Brazil, Caracas will be more important later on in the story. Also, the Covenant air force will show up later on, if you hadnt noticed, the Covenant arent exactly utilizing it right now. If you have any questions feel free to talk to me on my AIM MadSh33P or ICQ 280340692
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Gilze
7:28 pm | August 27, 2003
Excellent. I love it. Keep up the good work. The one thing i really liked was how you created an atomosphere!
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